Answers For Amina's project

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BRYSON: Well, Amina, thanks for letting me have your draft in such good time.

AMINA: Oh, that’s alright. I was just very anxious to hear what you think of it. You can

see that I decided to change the topic - I had been interested in looking at Barings Factory.

BRVSON: 1Oh, I think the hospital was a much better choice. In fact... well... I have to say that I thought it was good.

AMINA: Oh?

BRYSON: There’s still lots of work to be done .. .

AMINA: Oh yes ... of course.

BRYSON: 2But there’s plenty of good ideas. It opens well and the first chapter is fine but the middle section really stood out for me ... most interesting.

AMINA: 3That’s amazing because I really didn’t find it a bit easy to write .. .

BRYSON: How long did you work on the whole thing?

AMINA: Well, I spent about two or three weeks reading and doing general research and

then I dashed the writing off very quickly ... so about four weeks in all.

BRYSON: Well, that’s about par for the course. You’ve got a while yet to make the changes.

AMINA: Oh right... no problem ...

BRYSON: Right. Let’s have a look at my notes here. OK. Starting with section headings ... the broad divisions are good but you’ll have to re-do the actual headings.

I’ve made some suggestions in the margins ...

AMINA: OK. Thanks.

BRYSON: 4Now, this information on local housing ... I can see why you put it there but it really isn’t relevant to the approach you’ve taken.

AMINA: I think I see what you mean.

BRYSON: 5Now . . . what did I say about the interviews?

AMINA: I worked very hard on those. I really thought they were valuable.

BRYSON: 5They are, Amina, but they’re very complex and rather unclear at the moment. You’re going to have to spend a bit of time making the data a lot clearer.

AMINA: OK ... as long as you don't have to remove them altogether . . .

BRYSON: No, don’t worry.

AMINA: 6What about the chronology ... the list of dates? I wasn’t sure whether I should rewrite those.

BRYSON:6 My advice on that is to take them out. I feel it makes the whole piece appear too simplistic.

AMINA: OK, if it’ll help.

BRYSON: Now, there are a couple of other books I’d like you to look at. Have you got a

pen? Right. . . Approaches to Local History by John Mervis . . .

AMINA: Right.. .

BRYSON: 7And then I think you need to think about ways of representing interview data. Have a look at Sight and Sound by Kate Oakwell.

AMINA: Sight and Sound.

BRYSON: Then you know I’m going away on holiday next week . . .

AMINA: Yes.

BRYSON: 8So when you’ve made the changes I suggest you show the work to your Support Tutor.

AMINA: Support Tutor . . . right. . .

BRYSON: 9Then you do the proofreading . . .

AMINA: Proofreading . . . uh-huh. When by, do you think?

BRYSON: 10I’d aim for 29 June and after that you should get it laser printed . . . but be careful because the computer center closes on 10 July.

AMINA: And then I hand it in to ... ?

BRYSON: Oh, the Faculty Office as usual.

AMINA: OK, that’s fine. I think I’m all set now! Thanks very much for all your help.

BRYSON: A pleasure. See you when I get back.

AMINA: Yep. Thanks, Dr Bryson. Bye.

BRYSON: Bye.